Alibi ( Poem )

[Linx_is_me]

when time was slowing ,and my only fear was never knowing , when fate was false and your sad stories were all i had , for once in my life i was glad ... i am sorry and i know those things I did can not be erased my heart is searching for your grace ..the sad part is i sit and ask myself why i retrace my steps and every time you become my alibi ..all this horror i blame you all this anger i blame ...and i ... i don't know what to do ...and i ... i don't know whats true...and YOU....YOU DON'T KNOW ITS YOU ...
By Noah Brennaman ( other_are_there )

[jango]

this is a poem??????

oh my .. nice try at least :)

/takes breath

I think you might want to read more poetry and learn what changes effectively song lyrics or thoughts written down into poems .. then develop your own style with it. It's a craft after all .. just writing things down is something anyone can do, and therefore means very little and isn't something that will hold people's interest - the skill and value is taking everyday thoughts etc to a different level. What you've written here is a starting point, not a poem.

[HamadaLFC8]

Well it's a start, keep working hard on them and one day you'll master it ;)

[DirtyDMan]

I like it and think it was a good starting point....

[LemonRising]

I'd have to agree with jango.



Seems more like lyrics than a poem.
Goodstuff