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Kiss
03-16-2008, 09:09 PM
Chorus:
The moment before you die
Its a moment you can never lie
Your loved ones cry
You heave a heavy sigh

Now to our song

Chorus

However you die its gonna hurt
Whether your stabbed or got burn
Your spirits alone
No longer shone

Chorus

Whether Together or alone
Afterward you know you just gonna rot to bone
Lied in a coffin is ahead
It only happens when your dead

Chorus

Whether you rich or poor
People are gonna mourn
Fancy or not
Your still gonna rot

Chorus

Die happily its the only way
Even though its horrible day
Leave yourself
Your spirit alone on the "used" shelf

Chorus

Raw!
03-18-2008, 03:39 PM
I'm sorry, but I don't like it.
The reason why is it's about death. I prefer not thinking about it.

KittyCat72
03-18-2008, 05:09 PM
It's pretty good.:D But I'm all into death and society sucks songs so it fits my taste.

Raw!
03-18-2008, 05:22 PM
Also, just to add..
I don't really treat this as a song, but more of a poem.
It doesn't have the flow, know what I'm saying?
(I'm not trynna hate on you, I'm just giving you my opinion)

KittyCat72
03-18-2008, 05:29 PM
I bet it would if you added some instruments. Without them, add songs sound like poems. (kind of because they are)